Thank you for your feedback on this.
I am really learning a lot through Tinderbox.
Please, see the versions you suggested, all in one page.
PS Claire, I tried a darker shading but it was too imposing.
Also, about publishing it in the press, my idea was to send out postcards addressed to the editors of different papers, but if you can recommend another approach, I am all ears!
PS Yellowhammer, those cartoon cave men are by the fantastic Juan Giner, and very difficult to translate, but I will try.