A drawing inspired by this month's rollercoaster: bailout, snow, ice, budget, meltdown. And the few times I fell on my bum.
I want to fine tune this drawing so advice and comments are welcome on any of its parts (drawing, text, colour, design)
Thank you!
elida.
5 comments:
hey great drawing! good response to whats goin on. I`d like to see the `careful now `text in italics and an exclamation mark.
but thats the only change i can think of
its cool.
That's brilliant Elida, so apt for the times (and the weather!). I think Sinéad's suggestion's a good idea. May be a reddish colour suggesting danger would be good too but I'm just trying to find something to say, I like the yellow too!
Hey Elida
I simply love your drawing style! You have such efficiency of line. The movement here is great.
The mis-aligned yellow adds to the movement and the feeling of spontaniety.
Now for my ever-pedantic typography imput -
I think the type you have used is very appropriate and the yellow says 'caution' (as in road signage, ie Caution road works ahead). I think Italics and exclaimation marks would weaken the message as it is already so strong.
The danger here would be to over-work it. It already communicates everything it is intending to.
Fine tuning... the only thing that i could suggest is that the style of overlapping yellow and black could be exploited to add to the form. EG a subtle 'brush' sweep along the back to re-enforce the contour... like shading.
I really like it though. You should propose the finished visual to the times or some editorial publications.
:)
C
Hi Elida,
Very nice and bright, the yellow is great for surprise. I would include the text within the yellow background, to make it more of a piece.
YH
p.s. would you kindly post a translated version of your great cavemen drawings I found on one of your sites please, we could all do with a bit more humour!
Thank you all.
I am learning with your advice.
Yeah, I used yellow because it also implies danger.
I tried a strong shading, but didn't work for me.
Exclamation marks, I find them difficult to use well.
In the end, I tried all your ideas, see a new post above.
Thanks a lot!
elida.
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